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Old Piano Keys

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Very old piano, thought that it being old and extremely worn out with its few broken and missing keys would make for a pretty cool picture~~ Also thelighting is NOT FAKE, that was how light was coming in <3

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Taken with: Canon EOS Rebel T3 + 18-55 kit lens
Image size
4272x2848px 5.66 MB
Make
Canon
Model
Canon EOS REBEL T3
Shutter Speed
1/100 second
Aperture
F/5.6
Focal Length
55 mm
ISO Speed
320
Date Taken
Jun 16, 2012, 1:58:59 PM
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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Hi there! I'm here to bring you this critique as a part of <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/f/e/f…" alt=":iconfeedbackfrenzy:" title="FeedbackFrenzy"/>'s event <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)"/>

For starters, I do play the piano so my love for this piece may be a tad biased (oops!) but man, I do love myself a nice photo of an ancient piano! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt=":heart:" title="Heart"/> I see the small scratches and the way some keys are auto-dented down...such clarity! The perspective is also great and the composition is very full, with no "boring" or empty spots in it at all <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="29" height="21" alt=":dance:" title="Dance!"/>

A few suggestions on how to improve this piece:

¤ 1) Cropping of the picture: I think that the way this pic right now, there's a little too much of the piano keys. Don't get me wrong, I understand that they are the theme of this piece, but perhaps you could let the frame bigger by just a small tad (also makes that little edge line on the left less distracting)

¤ 2) Impact/Center of the piece: Other than just having the piano keys as the center, perhaps you could consider adding something that'll make the audience's eyes zone right in when they take a glance at this piece. This could be a hand, maybe two (an old and a young?), a flower, a pocketwatch...etc, but just SOMETHING that'll help with the impact of this piece that might also relate to/not distract from the theme.

In general, I still love this piece. Although it lost a few points in originality since there are so many pieces similar to this, it's still nice to be able to see one that's taken with such great lighting and perspective. I hope this critique helps and I look forward to seeing more of your works in the future! <img class="avatar" src="a.deviantart.net/avatars/l/o/l…" alt=":iconloveloveplz:" title="loveloveplz"/>